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Robert Reynolds, Tamas Ferencz, Poetry, translations

Tamas Ferencz Mar 03, 2018 (12:55)

Tíkua i hrisse to nóre, po auret nannemiéva;
turulyane lóme or áre, sin askate lumbor Anar.

"The snow is thawing across the land, it will be gone in two days,
darkness used to prevail over sunlight, now the sun rips the clouds apart."

Tamas Ferencz Mar 03, 2018 (13:54)

I am trying to get into the habit of providing an audio version of my texts whenever I can - here are my two limping hexameters from above:
https://drive.google.com/open?id=1yF-SDSjAopLBCEspZamBr2GBr1ClGDKX

Robert Reynolds Mar 03, 2018 (14:22)

Nice! I particularly like nannem- “to disappear”. Wouldn’t the future perfect be nannémiéva? Using the numeral dual without an explicit cardinal seems convenient here. Past consuetudinal works well, too. Wouldn’t the present continuative be tíkua? I may be missing a metrical pattern...

Edit: just saw the hexameter note, so disregard about the long vowels

Tamas Ferencz Mar 03, 2018 (15:41)

+Robert Reynolds yeah, the hexameter forces me to keep the short vowels, although I am breaking the metre anyway with tuluryane which is too long by one syllable, but what the heck.

Robert Reynolds Mar 03, 2018 (15:43)

+Tamas Ferencz It works, and the poem’s content is pleasant as well 😊