G+ LoME Archive
May 26, 2015 (13:30)
Tunga feanya ve quinga, la istan man tirien hí,
Mailie urya i hráva mal séren milya i hón.
(My soul is taut as a bow, I don't know who to heed,
The flesh burns full of lust but the hear longs for peace.)
Edit: corrected - the hexameter was lame.
May 26, 2015 (16:00)
May 26, 2015 (18:28)
I guess I meant rhythm. I will have to review meter. It has been too long.
May 26, 2015 (23:52)
The first line scans perfectly as a (quantitative) hexameter, but I can't figure out the metre of line 2. Am I wrong in expecting a pentameter?
May 27, 2015 (10:16)
true, this is not a regular distichon. I was considering to write the second line as
mailie urya i hrón, séren milya i hón
, to make it a pentameter, but
may not be a valid form, so I went for an irregular meter which still sounds good in my opinion.
May 27, 2015 (20:55)
I see, thanks.
I don't think
needs to be considered less valid than
, though, so I would have preferred the pentameter with its nice Leonine rhyme.