Here are revisions of the sentences I asked about back in june:
Ortuvan hendunya i carindonna (carmonna), i orontion ya lá retë
Ortuvan hendunya   (to the calmer) i ëaron ursala hrávavë.
Ortuvan hendunya envinyatarenna i nwalmeo ya haryan imi.

In the second line, I put maker when it should have been "calmer," so the sentence should read "I will lift my eyes to the calmer of the oceans raging wild."

Here is another part of the song that I need help with:

God, my God, I cry out; your beloved needs you now.
God be near, calm my fear.

I have Eru, Erunya, inyë rama; meldalya (needs) elyë sí.
Á Eru na  (near - adverb?), (calm) sossenya.

This song has been a lifeline for me in the two hardest times of my life. I would like eventally make a tengwar print to send to the author with the full story. 

I need to learn how to make missing forms of words from attested ones (maurë - need to verb needs, for example). Thank you for your help!