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James Coish, Paul Strack, Poetry, translations

James Coish Aug 06, 2018 (02:26)

Edit:
Patan telqui cantanen auresse,
Patan telco attanen endauresse,
Ar patan telqui neldenen andúnesse.
Ma Man nán?

Paul Strack Aug 06, 2018 (06:57)

Very nice. I see nothing I’d change, except maybe following the “last declineable word” rule: telqui cantanen.

i hanquenta: Atan (mal lá Elda)

James Coish Aug 06, 2018 (17:33)

+Paul Strack I forgot about that rule. I think I like it in this case. It helps the repeat of the phrases.